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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say what the participant liked about the hotel. •Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. •Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.

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Respected sir, Hope you are doing well.
Myself
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 Santhoshkumar, organizing committee member of Integra company.
Last
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 week, we conducted
a
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an
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 all-day meeting at your hotel with lunch, dinner and refreshments. I would like to express my thanks because most of the participants were happy with your
dinning
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dining
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 service and
polite
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the polite
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 nature of your employees.
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, the ambience is really great with wonderful paintings. I would like to bring your attention
on
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to
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foods
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food
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. Most of the participants complained
about
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that
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 the quantity of
food
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is
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was
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 not enough. Even though the taste is great but limited quantity of
food
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 dissatisfied the customers. I would like to suggest
to improve
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improving
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 the quantity of
foods
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food
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 since
everyone
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everyone's
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 appetite is different.
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, you can serve extra
food
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 for
who
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those who
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 are in need. Though the cost is high on your foods you should increase the amount of
food
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 you supply. I hope you
would
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 consider and improve the service in future Best regards, Santhoshkumar

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vocabulary
Consider using more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance your writing style.
grammar
Make sure to check for minor grammatical errors to improve clarity and professionalism.
task response
You have clearly expressed gratitude and specific details about the positive aspects of the hotel.
coherence
The letter follows a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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