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The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
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The pie graph illustrates the proportion of consumption of
water
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 for different goals namely industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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 ,and domestic
use
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 in six nations north and South
America
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 ,
Europe
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,
Africa
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 ,
central
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Central
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Asia
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 , and South East
Asia
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Africa
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 ,central
Asia
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south
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South
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America
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 and South East
Asia
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 had the highest
number
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 of
water
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 in agricultural
use
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 ,
whereas
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 North
America
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 and
Europe
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 had a larger percentage in industrial
use
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.
To begin
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 with,
according to
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 the agricultural
use
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 it can be seen that Central has a significant
number
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 of using
water
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 at 88% and the second largest sector was
Africa
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 at 84%
then
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 it came south East
Asia
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 and South
America
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 at 81% and 71% respectively.
According to
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 industrial
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use
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use,
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Europe
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 and North
America
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 had the biggest
number
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 of consuming
water
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 comprising 53% and 48% respectively.
However
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, Central
Asia
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 and
Africa
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 had the lowest proportion of using
water
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5% and 7% respectively. The most interesting noticeable is that in all the countries the domestic
use
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 had a small
number
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 of
water
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 central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 had the same figures at 7% and North
America
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 and
Europe
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 had almost the same percentages.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america, europe, africa, asia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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