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Band 3

Your English speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend.in your email Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you both learn this game together

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Dear jay, I hope
this
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 email finds you in great spirits and good health.
i
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I
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 would tell you about a
game
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 that you play well and enjoy.if you take an interest in
this
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game
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 I suggest you
to
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do
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 cricket.we learn so many things from
this
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game
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. First and foremost,I recommend
you
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apply
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to
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apply
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cricket,it's suitable for you because you do not play
outdoors
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outdoor
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 games and can't see
another beautiful places
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another beautiful place
other beautiful places
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of
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in
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 my village,if you
would
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apply
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play in the stadium
also
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 enjoy the crowd who are
sit
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 in the
play
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playing
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 area.one more thing I want to tell you about my thinking,when you play physical games
which
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it
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make
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makes
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 you stronger and healthier because your whole body
involves
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is involved
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 in
this
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game
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.
On the other hand
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,I would
explain
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explain to
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 you
that
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apply
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how you can play
this
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game
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 when you
wil
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apply
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go outside with me and make friends, they can teach
how
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you how
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 to play in the playground.
you
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You
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 can watch closely and observe how to play.with
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practice
practise
prectice
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prectice,
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 you will improve and play well. I suggest that we learn
this
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game
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 together as
such
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 we play in our garden and practice with each other,how we can improve our batting and bowling and hopefully you play better than I do. With love, Rabia

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Try to proofread your email for grammatical errors and punctuation marks, as this will enhance clarity.
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Make sure to elaborate on your recommendations with more details or examples for improved task achievement.
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The suggestion to learn cricket together adds a personal touch and creates a sense of camaraderie.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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