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The graph below shows electricty production (in terrawatt hours) in France between 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows electricty production (in terrawatt hours) in France between 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line chart shows the electricity production in
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france
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France
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 by four sources in
terrawatt
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terawatt
 hours between 1982 and 2012. In 1982 the thermal was the most important source representing
a
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110
TW-h
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, the nuclear and hydroelectric were
following
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followed
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 the list with a production of 50
TW-h
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.
For
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At
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 that moment in
France
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,
the
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renewables
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renewable
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energy
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 did not produce anything and
this
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 continued until 1996. During the following years, thermal
energy
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 was losing prominence and nuclear
energy
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 became the dominant
energy
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 source for
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france
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France
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 reaching
the
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a
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 peak demand
in
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of
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 more than 400
TW-h
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 in 2010. Hydropower on the other side, can be described as a consistent source
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 its production
is
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being
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 between
the
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50
TW-h
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 and 80
TW-h
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.
Finally
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, the renewal
energy
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 has been increasing
from
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since
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 1996 having 20
TW-h
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producting
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products
 in 2010.
To Conclude
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, it is notorious that
France
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 has invested in sustainable
energy
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 practices,
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this
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which
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allow
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allows
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to
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it to
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 have an electricity portfolio stronger and
reducing
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reduces
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 reliance on fossil fuels.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, tw-h, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • terawatt hours
  • increase
  • decrease
  • dominant source
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • investment
  • sustainable energy practices
  • hydropower
  • consistent source
  • peak demand
  • electricity generation
  • electricity portfolio
  • diverse energy sources
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