The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic gives information about the average temperature in New York and
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the revenue
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generated from
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of bathing suits. All of the information is from the first half of 2012.  Not surprisingly we can see that the coldest months were those in winter with the temperature rising steadily throughout spring and into summer.
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, the warmer weather does not seem to correlate with an increase in bathing
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.  Revenue from bathing
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sales
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started fairly strong at the beginning of the period and rose steadily over the first three months from ten to fifteen million dollars.
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shot up with revenue doubling in April.
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sales
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decreased dramatically over May and June. 
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, we can see that most people in New York seem to prefer buying a bathing
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in the winter and spring months and, contrary perhaps to expectations, bathing
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sales
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were relatively poor in the summer.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, suit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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