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To conclude, allocating more resources to improve public transport systems do have advantages as it preserve a good quality of our precious environment, but its above the requirements of plans could severely impact the employment of automotive industry professionals.

In recent years, many cities are having issues
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 traffic congestion
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 the increase in population. Nowadays,
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 of urban areas are spending money to improve public transportation for betterment.
This
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 effect has its own merits and demerits. I will explain both with related examples in the following essay.
To begin
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 can be helpful to the community to get better quality of air.
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, a study by the University of Waterloo mentioned that 60% of emissions of CO2 can be reduced by using public transit.
In addition
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 to that it is
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 beneficial for people to save
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as well as
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 money and reduce stress.
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, people can travel faster with minimal cost by transit system.
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, they do not have to worry about parking space.
On the other hand
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, we cannot ignore the drawbacks of
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 effect. The major disadvantage is that individuals have to wait for
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 amount of
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according to
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 public transportation’ frequencies to travel. To illustrate, one can have to wait a longer
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 during off-peak hours, which may cause
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 for their work, appointments, and commitments. Not only that, sometimes people feel uncomfortable
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travelling public transit
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 much crowd, which may
also
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 affect their health. In conclusion, public transportation in cities is beneficial for the environment
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 to the community by saving their
time
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 and money
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, it
also
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 has some drawbacks related to delays and inconvenience.
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, individuals have to use public
transits
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 wisely.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to vary your sentence structure. Using a mix of simple and complex sentences can enhance the flow of your writing.
language
Always check your verb tense and ensure consistency. Phrases like 'are having issues' could be more effectively conveyed as 'have been experiencing issues.'
language
Be careful with pluralization and countable nouns. For example, instead of 'public transportation helps to reduce pollution in the environment,' you could say 'public transportation options help to reduce pollution in urban environments.'
task achievement
Your introduction clearly outlines the topic and the purpose of your essay, which is a strong starting point.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your points, which adds credibility to your arguments.
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