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The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows distribution of Aaustralian water consumption for last year

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows distribution of Aaustralian water consumption for last year
The two pie charts illustrate
proportion
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the proportion
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 of electricity gained by various
energy
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 sources in Scotland
for
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twenty years ago and
for
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last
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 year.
Overwhelming
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The overwhelming
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 majority of
energy
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generated
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 by coal regardless of periods of time. There is a notable increase in
demands
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of
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 nuclear
as
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a
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energy
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source
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 from 19.6
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percent
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 to 26.4
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percent
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.
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, the most declined
source
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 is
a coal
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coal
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 went from 41.4
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percent
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 to 32.7
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percent
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.
Gas
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 kept stability in
energy
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producing
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 with
tiny
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a tiny
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descend
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 from 22.3
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percent
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per cent
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 to
an
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21.7
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percent
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. Hydro natural flow as an
energy
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source
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used
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was used
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 decently with having
proportion
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a proportion
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 of 8.7
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percent
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per cent
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 and
last
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 year lowered it to 7.9
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percent
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. Oil with 2.1
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percent
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 being
most
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 unpopular
source
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 increased in demand to 4
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percent
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, leaving behind
hydro pumped
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 storage
with
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at
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 2.2
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percent
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, source, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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