The line graph below shows the trends in international money transfers sent by immigrants from the United States, the United Kingdom, and Australia from 2000 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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illustrate

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the course of money sent from three

English speaking

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country

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countries

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;

United

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the United

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states,

United

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the United

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kingdom

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, and Australia by foreigners from the year 2000 to 2021.

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United

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states

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and

United

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Kingdom

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fluctuated over the years,

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Australia steadily

increase

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with, immigrants residing in

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the United

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States made the most

transfer

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transfers

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over the 20 years period.

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they started at about 25% in 2000,

this

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figure increased to approximately 74% by 2020.

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, in 2020 United

Kingdom

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Sent

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around 14% of money internationally,

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this

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figure significantly

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in 2020 to slightly below 70%, there

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been some fluctuations throughout the years. Australia has

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apply

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maintain

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a similar trend over the time period,

started

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as the

least

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lowest

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country at exactly 10%, with

steady

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increase to about 55% in 2020.

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there has been a slight increase

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foreign

transfer

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transfers

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made from

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the United

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State

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in 2018, the opposite was seen in

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Kingdom

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demostrating

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demonstrating

a dramatic decline from 40% in 2006 to 20% in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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The line graph below shows the trends in international money transfers sent by immigrants from the United States, the United Kingdom, and Australia from 2000 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In some cultures, children are told they can achieve anything if they work hard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Today, there are more television channels than ever before. Some people think this leads to more choices for television viewers. Others, however, believe this causes the quality of television programmes to decline. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The Impact of Technology on Education and Learning

It can be difficult for small local shops to compete with large supermarkets and with on-line shops. How does this affect local communities? What could be done to improve this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.