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Band 2.5

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environ. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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There is no denying the fact that the production of goods
have
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 increased significantly.
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 it is a commonly held belief that our
nature
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 environment has been affected
due to
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 the side
affects
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effects
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 of
this
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 amount of productivity.
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 essay will discuss the factors
conturbuting
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contributing
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 issue, and include some measures to tackle the situation.
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 with, the increase
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 productivity means that a substantial amount of industrial waste is
throwing
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 at the same time; which is considered impossible to break down by the environment itself, leading to a damaged ecosystem. It is
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 possible to say that some of these goods
are consist
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 of chemical elements that cause air pollution because of
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 toxic gas emissions.
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,
fuil
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fuel
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 production is the principal factor of ozone layer pollution on the earth, as it releases large amounts of these adverse gases, which
contirbutes
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contributes
contribute
 to
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climate change and
an
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environmental
crissis
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crises
.

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introduction
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coherence
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task achievement
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language
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language
Check for grammatical errors and typos, as they can interfere with the clarity of your expressions and affect the overall impression of your writing.
content
The essay addresses an important environmental issue that is relevant to contemporary discussions.
task achievement
The intention to discuss both the causes and potential solutions to the problem shows a comprehensive approach to the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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