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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph compares the production and consumption of
electricity
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 in ten different
counties
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countries
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 in 2014. The units are measured in kilo Wh.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that in
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China
 and the
USA
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USA,
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 the levels of
electricity
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 usage and production were the highest, Korea was less than
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 nine countries.
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 the nine countries produced more and consumed less
electricity
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, the opposite was true for Germany. Moving to a more detailed analysis,
Chaina
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China
 and the USA dominated in generating, and consuming
electricity
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, at more than 5,000 and about 4,000, respectively. Russia was the third highest producer and producer in the world with merely 1,000 which was followed by Japan accounting for approximately 900.
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India is the fifth producer (871) and consumer (698.8) in the world in terms of
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. With regard to Canada and France, each of them produced about 600 and used more than 450.
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 Brazil and Germany generated roughly the same amount of
electricity
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 (530), the level of
electricity
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 consumption in Germany is higher than that of usage in Brazil by approximately 130 with the latter accounting for 455.8. The Republic of Korea created and consumed less than 400 which was the tenth highest indicator in the world.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • top ten countries
  • bar chart
  • data representation
  • significant figures
  • discrepancy
  • outliers
  • comparative analysis
  • resource management
  • energy policy
  • reliant on imports
  • balanced ratio
  • notable trends
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