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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph displays the ten countries that consumed and produced the largest amount of electricity in the year 2014.
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, China and the United States led in both output and use. Generation exceeded consumption in all the countries except Germany. In more detail, China and the US boasted the highest volumes in both producing and consuming, reaching 5,398 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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as well as
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 4,099 and 3,866
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, respectively. In comparison, the corresponding figures for the Republic of Korea were only 485.1 and 449.5
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, making it the smallest electricity-creating and devouring country. Of the other eight countries, Russia was the only country whose formation and absorption were over 1,000
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kWh
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, at exactly 1,057 and 1,038
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kWh
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. It is
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 noteworthy that Germany's output was outweighed by its consumption of electricity. In terms of Japan, India, Canada, France, and Brazil, their outputs ranged from 530 to 936
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kWh
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whereas
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 their usages ranged from 456 to 857
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kWh
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, in the same order.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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