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The diagrams below show the development of Porth Harbour between 2000 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of Porth Harbour between 2000 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The plans illustrate the development of Porth
Harbour
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 in 2000 and as of today.
Overall
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, the port has been expanded to provide more ferries and to accommodate more tourists coming to the
harbour
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.
Moreover
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, new construction of some facilities was added. In 2000, there was only one dock located in the north of the
harbour
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, but today, another dock has been built next to it resulting in more ferries able to drop off or pick up passengers simultaneously. Another development
seen
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 in the south of the
harbour
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 where the castle that was once abandoned, now has been redeveloped into a
hotel
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 for visitors to stay.
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, the former public beach near the castle has now become a private beach for the
hotel
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 visitor.
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this
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development
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development,
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 a new road was
also
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 constructed as an access to the
hotel
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 where visitors can spot cafes and shops along the way. These facilities are located on the northwest part of the
hotel
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 near the lifeboat that
remain
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remains
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 in the same location. The southern car park that could only be accessed through the southern road
,
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 now can be used through the main road running along the west part of the
harbour
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. There were some changes at the
harbour
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.
Marina
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The marina
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 and fishing boats had been switched
where
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and
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 now the Marina has more space for
the
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private yachts.
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, additional showers and toilets
had
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 been built next to the Marina and in between the car park.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words harbour, hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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