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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of
food
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 and items purchased from
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 in three European countries in the
year
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years
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 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, the two nations spent more on provisions than
food
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, except for
country
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 3 which
acquire
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acquired
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 more
food
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 than goods.
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 with,
Th
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The
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 most
good
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goods
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 purchased in 1998
was
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were
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 from
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country
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the country
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 almost 40%.
Although
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this
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figures
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 has
incline
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 to approximately 50%
2008
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in 2008
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, it was still not the most goods acquiring
country
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.
Country
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 1 purchased the most goods at about 60% in 2008, though
this
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 number was significantly lower in the
passed
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past
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 10 years, which was around 19%.
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 trend is evident in terms of
food
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 bought in both countries 1 and 2, with
country
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 2 having the highest
food
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 intake in 1998 at around 25%,
whereas
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country
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 1 bought the majority of meals in the year 2008 at just about 40%. Despite the variation in the first two countries, the 3rd
country
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remain
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remains
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lowest
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the lowest
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, with a slight change, with the percentage of
purchased
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purchases
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 in both years being less than 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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