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The chart shows the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants

The chart shows the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants
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The pie charts provide data on the rate of average budgetary allocations on restaurant food in four different years. The line graph shows the number of
meals
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 consumed at
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 joints and
sitdown
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cusines
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cuisine
 from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportion of budgetary funds spent on restaurant foods had an increasing pattern and most families
prefered
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prefer
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
eatries
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eateries
entries
. Starting with the pie chart, in 1970, 90% of food funds were allocated to cooking home dishes
while
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 only 10% of the budget was for eating out. As the years progressed,
this
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 percentage had reduced significantly. By the end of the period, the
porportion
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proportion
 of money spent on food cooked at home and that which was used at restaurants was the same at 50%. Turning to the line graph, in 1970,
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
meals
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 and
sitdown
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 restaurant
meals
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 had the same number of 20. Both categories grew over the years, but by 2000,
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fastfood
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fast food
resturants
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restaurants
 had more patronizers than
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sitdown
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sit-down
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eatries
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eateries
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. Over 80
meals
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 were consumed from
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 joints
while
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 approximately 50
meals
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 were
gotten
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obtained
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 from
sitdown
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restautrants
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restaurants
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, fastfood, sitdown with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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