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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of international
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students
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 enrolments from five different countries in
thee
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the
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 different universities.
Overall
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, we can see that Smithtown
University
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 accepted 6000
students
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 from India, almost 4000 from Nepal, 2000 from Vietnam, slightly under 1000 from Indonesia and 500 from Colombia.
Furthermore
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, the
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university
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University
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 of Riverview had 7500
students
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 from India enrolled, 5000 from Nepal, 4000 from Vietnam, slightly over 1000 from Indonesia and 1000 from Colombia.
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, Earlwood
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university
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University
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 accepted 5000 persons from India, 4000 from Nepal, 3000 from Vietnam, 1000 from Indonesia and 1000 from Colombia. After taking all the details, we can conclude that the
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university
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University
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 of Riverview was the one that had more
application
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applications
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 from foreign
students
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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