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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data on the proportion of women who participated in top management roles in
Eldan
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,
Bamforth
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, and Finsbury
Ltd
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. from the year 1975 to 2015.
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,
Eldan
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Ltd
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 and
Bamforth
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Ltd
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 showed a constant increase over the
40
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40-year
years
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 period,
whereas
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 Finsbury
Ltd
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 fluctuated throughout the time period.
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 with,
Eldan
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 and
Bamforth
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 companies were the lowest in 1975 at 3% and 9% respectively.
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 there has been a gradual rise in figures over the
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, the most significant incline was between 2000 and 2015, when
Eldan
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Ltd
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 almost doubled, from 33% in 2000 to 64% in 2015.
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,
Bamforth
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female
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 in senior management nearly tripled in the
last
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 15
years
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. Despite being the lowest at 17% in 2000, it peaked at 46%, becoming the second highest in 2015.
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, Finsbury has the most employed women in senior positions at the beginning of the provided time period, starting at 16%, but along the line, there are steady variations over the
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, falling to the lowest in 2015 with only 26% of women in top position.
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, in spite of the fluctuations, there is 10% over the 40
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words eldan, bamforth, ltd, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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