The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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amount
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number
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of men and women engaged in
further
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education
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in Britain in three different
years
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During 1990-1991, 1 million male individuals engaged in
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part
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part-time
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time
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education
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and only a small proportion were studying
full
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full-time
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time
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. Ten
years
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later in 1980-1981, the number of
male
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males
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enrolled in
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part
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part-time
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time
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education
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decrased
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decreased
to 900,000,
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however
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however,
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a slight increase
is
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was
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observed in
full
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full-time
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time
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education
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. Male
candidated
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candidate
candidates
studying full
time
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has
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further
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increased to more than 200,000 during 1990-1991,
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however
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however,
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those who were doing
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part
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part-time
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time
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rmained
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remained
less than 1 million. The amount of
female
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females
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enrolled in
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part
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part-time
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time
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education
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in 1970-1971
is
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less than 800,00 and an upward trend was observed in the following
years
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1980-1981 and reaching more than one million in the year 1990-1991.
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femal
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females
studying
full
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full-time
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time
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has
also
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increased from less than 100,000 in 1970-1971 to more than 200,000 in 1990-1991. The amount of
Male
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Males
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engaged in
part
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-
time
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education
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has decreased throughout the
years
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,
whereas
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the females doing
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part
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part-time
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time
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education
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increased over the course of
time
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. Both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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enrolled in
full
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full-time
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time
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education
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remained similar in the year 1990-1991.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words education, years, part, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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