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Band 2.5

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views adn give your own opinion.

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There is no
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doubt
 that these days many males and females would prefer to learn other courses
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 to their major study. And some people
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 idea. In
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 essay, I am
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 to discuss both views and give my point of view. In terms of the positive side
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 having knowledge of other subjects, it is held a belief that
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 may lead to
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broaden
 their horizon.
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, learners will master new skills
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management
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, learning other subjects helps students to have ideas about different disciplines.
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, other specialists
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 that students must focus on the basic courses to get a good qualification. In
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, studying other subjects
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 to be wasting of time and
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.
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, it may affect the outcomes by getting low scores. In conclusion,
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 there is a conflict
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 studying areas
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 to the main major,
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 tend to believe that it is good for people to attempt to learn and search
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 new fields.
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 will give
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 skills that enable them to get good
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opportunities
 in the future.

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Language
Ensure all spelling mistakes are corrected (e.g., 'duobt' should be 'doubt', 'goimg' should be 'going', 'borden' should be 'broadening', 'manegment' should be 'management', 'oppourtinities' should be 'opportunities'). This will enhance the clarity of your writing.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, you mention 'different disciplines' but do not specify what these might be.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using linking words more effectively (e.g., 'however', 'moreover', 'furthermore'). This will help in creating smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
Structure
The essay presents both sides of the argument and ultimately concludes with your own opinion, which is a good structure for this type of essay.
Content
You mention skills gained from studying other subjects, which shows an understanding of the broader benefits beyond mere qualifications.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdisciplinary education
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • broadening horizons
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • competitive job market
  • expertise
  • academic performance
  • workload
  • educational pressure
  • specialization
  • multidisciplinary approach
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