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You have heard that your company is organising a language training abroad for a limited number of participants. Write a letter of interest state your position in the company explain why they should include you in the training Explain how training could benefit you and your company.

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Dear Sir, I am working as a general manager in your organization which is situated in London .
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 week , I heard about abroad language training program
, which
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 is our organization going to
organized
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 for some
high ranked
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 employees in
German
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.
As my
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 post in the office ,
it is
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 proved to be beneficial not only to me but
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for
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 company growth, if I learn more language . Because of
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this
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 I am able to deal with diverse international clients .
Our most
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 of the company investors and CEO
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 mostly
Spanish speaking
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 persons . So , I believe that
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 is the main proponent to
enroll
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 me in
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 program .
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apply
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I can make the workers
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work more efficiently
to teach
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by teaching
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 them
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 new language as well .
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, I request you to consider my name
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 course. Yours faithfully, Kamal

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure accurate grammar and sentence structure to enhance clarity in your writing. Consider revising phrases that seem awkward or unclear.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly outline your points in separate paragraphs to strengthen the logical flow of your letter.
task achievement
Focus on providing more specific examples of how the training will benefit both you and the company to fully address the task.
task achievement
You've demonstrated a clear understanding of the purpose of the letter, expressing your interest in the training program effectively.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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