The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five
energy
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sources
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(coal,
gas
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,
petro
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petrol
, nuclear and other
sources
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) in France in two years.
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,
it is clear that
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both coal and
gas
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accounted for over half of all
energy
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sources
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,
while
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the
the
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least was other
energy
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sources
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. There was only a minimal increase in the output of
gas
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and coal,
whereas
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nuclear and other
sources
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almost doubled . The petro was the only source to decrease over the period.
According to
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what is shown, coal dominated all
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in both years, it had the highest production in 1995 with 29.80% and 30.93% in 2005,
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gas
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second after coal, the figures show a slight increase
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its yield, it rose from 29.63% to 30.31%. The use of nuclear power rose significantly from 6.40% in 1995 to 10.10% in 2005. Other
sources
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of
energy
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production accounted for 4.90% in 1995 and climbed to 9.10% in 2005.
On the other hand
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, petro use dropped from 29.27% to 19.55% .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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