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You recently spent the night at an expensive hotel. There was a problem with your room, but the hotel staff was unable to do anything about it. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter • describe the problem. • explain what happened when you asked the hotel staff for help. • say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am one of your recent customers and I stayed in room number 15 on 23rd July. I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention to the issue that I faced during my stay. Unfortunately, on that
date
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date,

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 the central heating system of the hotel was not
wroking
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working

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properly and my room was
exremely
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extremely

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cold the whole night. When I called to receptionist to inform him about the situation, he said
this
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 problem
will
Wrong verb form
would

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 be solved in an hour.
However
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, nothing
chenged
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changed

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till the morning.
In addition
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, a few hours later, I called again to ask for extra blankets but no one answered the phone. I am really disappointed with the service that I received in exchange for
great
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a great
the great

The noun phrase great amount seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 amount of money that I paid;
therefore
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, I request you to refund a portion of
money
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the money

The noun phrase money seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 or provide me with a discounted voucher for
the
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apply

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future use.
Moreover
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, I recommend you
to
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apply

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recruit more
resposible
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responsible

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and professional staff who can contribute your guests to have a comfortable experience in your hotel. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Danny Johnson

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling errors, such as 'wroking' (working) and 'extremely' instead of 'exremely'. Attention to detail can enhance the clarity of your message.
task achievement
Consider providing more details about how you felt during your stay to enhance the emotional impact of your letter.
task achievement
You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this kind of communication.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is logically structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs describing the issue, and a conclusion outlining your request.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • malfunctioning
  • inconvenience
  • rectify
  • compensate
  • dismissive
  • unresponsive
  • escalate
  • assure
  • inadequate
  • suffered
  • resolve
  • address the issue
  • accommodation
  • gestures of goodwill
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