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​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie charts represent the
parcentage
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percentage
 of
food
Use synonyms
 consumption in (
world
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the world
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, China and India) in 2008.
Firstly
Linking Words
, there were a number of
fluctuation
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fluctuations
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 in
food
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 consumption
such
Linking Words
 as
,
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apply
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the
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apply
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processed
food
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was
Wrong verb form
being
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a
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the
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 most common item which
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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people consume in two countries and
world
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the world
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.
Secondly
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, the nuts and seeds registered
a
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the
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 lowest spend
in
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on
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food
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 which eating.
Finally
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, the second
food
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which
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apply
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consume
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consumed
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 by
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the sitizen
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sitizen
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citizen
 was
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and fruits in the world and China. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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processed
food
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 experienced an upward
percent
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percentage
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 of consumption,
while
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the
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apply
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nuts and seeds showed a downward number in the
over
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apply
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period
which
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apply
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given.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average consumption
  • Global composition
  • Food category
  • Meat, vegetables, fruits, grains
  • Percentage, proportion
  • Comparative analysis
  • Similarities and differences
  • Intake, consumption patterns
  • Striking differences
  • Notable similarities
  • Higher/lower consumption
  • Significant difference
  • Proportionate share
  • Relevant comparison
  • General trend
  • Insight
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