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The rising levels of traffic congestion in many big cities around the world can cause the decline in the quality of life in cities. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Over the course of the recent decades, high
traffic
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volum
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volume
 in urban areas
,
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 has hampered the quality of life of city dwellers. It seems the main reason behind
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 issue is overpopulation and urbanization in big
cities
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.
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, some immediate measures should be taken to address
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 problem effectively. Admittedly, the ever-increasing number of people moving to
cities
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 is the root cause of the rising levels of
traffic
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.
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, since more and more people are flocking to
cities
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 for better job opportunities and living standards, the number of motor vehicles on the roads is
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 rising.
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 situation is worsened by the lack of efficient infrastructure
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 as public transport and suitable motorways, which leads to heavy gridlock in rush hours. In addressing
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 problem, the joint effort of both governments and
local
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 population is required. States must invest in improving public
transprotation
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transportation
 like
expansion
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the expansion
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 of
mertro
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metro
 networks or increasing the frequency of buses in
the
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crowded areas.
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, people should consider various aspects of living conditions in huge
cities
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 before resettling impulsively. In summary, overpopulation and
traffic
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dismanagement
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mismanagement
has
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 created heavy
traffic
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congestions
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congestion
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 in bigger towns.
Therefor
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, some serious actions should be implemented to avoid the
diteriorating
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deteriorating
deterioration
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 challenge on
humans
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 lives.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your essay for minor spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'transprotation' should be 'transportation', 'deteriorating' instead of 'diteriorating'). Such errors can detract from the overall impression of your writing.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear understanding of the causes of traffic congestion and suggests practical measures to address the issue.
coherence and cohesion
The logical organization of the essay helps the reader follow your argumentation easily.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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