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In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.
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The line chart exhibits trends of how many families in the United Kingdom utilize modern
technology
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 between 1996/97 to 2002/03. It compares the popularity of devices
such
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 as the CD player, the
home
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computer
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, the mobile
phone
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, and the
internet
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. All items have shown
a
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positive growth indicating more houses have got more access to modern
technology
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 each year. Some periods had
slower
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 increase, but none of these items stayed at the same rate.
Initially
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, in 1996, the CD player was the most common product in the market (60%), followed by the
home
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computer
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, and the mobile
phone
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 with both having a quite significant gap with the most popular device (up to 40%). A new
technology
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 was introduced in the following period, named the
internet
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. In its early years, the
internet
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 was only found in less than 20% of houses, leaving them as the least popular items in the country. In the next year, it had the most uplift in access rate despite still falling behind the
home
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computer
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 which was overtaken by the mobile
phone
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. The rank of popularity remained the same until the 2002/03 period when the mobile
phone
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 was closing its gap with the CD player, and the
internet
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also
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 competing with the
home
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computer
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. Between these periods, mobile
phone
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 usage has surged from less than 20% to more than 60%, making it the most emerging
technology
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 in the country.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words technology, home, computer, phone, internet with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • changing patterns
  • domestic access
  • modern technology
  • homes
  • United Kingdom
  • trend
  • acceleration
  • socioeconomic factors
  • income levels
  • educational attainment
  • correlation
  • internet access
  • personal computers
  • digital connection
  • computing
  • drop
  • plateau
  • asymptotic behavior
  • saturation
  • emergence
  • innovation
  • adoption rates
  • households
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