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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the chart
demonstrate
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employment
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 and education statistics of eight
european
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European
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countries
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 in 2015.
Overall
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,Norway had
highest
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the highest
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income
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wit
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with
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 41,483
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euro
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whereas
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 Bulgaria had the lowest
income
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 with 3,332
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euro
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 ın 2015.Bulgaria,Greece and and Portugal's annual ,
income
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 is lower than 10.000
euro
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.Other
countries
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' average
income
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 is between about 20000 and 40000
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euro
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. Norway had the highest
employment
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rate
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 which is between 16 and 64 years old with 74.8 percent. Greece had the lowest
employment
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rate
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 ın 2015,50.8
percent
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.Other
countries
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'
employment
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rate
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 is close to
eachother
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each other
.
According to
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chart
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,amount 8
countries
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 25-64
year olds
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year-olds
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 with college education
rate
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 is between about 20 and 40 percent.
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However
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 the
norwey
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Norway
 had the highest
rate
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while
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 Portugal had the lowest. Norway's
all
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rates
higher
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 than other
countries
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also
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 all the
countries
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'
employment
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rate
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rates
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is
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are
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 more than 25-
64 year olds
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64-year-olds
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 with
college
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a college
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 education.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, countries, income, euro, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Higher education attainment
  • Correlation
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Policy implications
  • Gender differences
  • Youth employment
  • Age-segmented
  • Statistics
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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