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The graph showsthe amount offruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 20 10. Fruit production in 4 countries (millions of tonnes)

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The graph illustrates
cultivated
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propotion
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proportion
 of fruits in terms of
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 in four countries:
France
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, Spain, Germany,
Turkey
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and Turkey
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 over four decades
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 in 1970.
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, Spain
maintain
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 the dominance of production, despite having a downward trend after
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 decade.
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, German had
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declined over the period,
reached
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a
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 lowest point.
Meanwhile
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 Turkey and
France
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 had an upward trend,
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aligning
 within years. Starting
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 5,5
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of
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tonnes
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, Spain plateaued highest position in 1980
of
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 approximately 6
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of
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tonnes
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. Afterwards,
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 steeply dipped, dropping to almost 5
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of
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tonnes
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 in 2010.
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, there was a significant reduction
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 Germany's
fruits
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fruit
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 manufacturing for the entire duration, rocketing from 2.5 to 1,5
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of
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tonnes
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 in 1990.
Remaining
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 stable decrease, peaked
just
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at just
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 over 1,2
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of
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tonnes
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 in 2010,
this
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 figure being the lowest level of production during the whole period. The number of fruits
was
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grown by Turkey considerably climbed, almost
doubled
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doubling
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 from 2 to 3,5
million
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of
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tonnes
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 in 2010.
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,
France
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 aligned an upward trend, surging from roughly 1 to nearly 2,8
million
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of
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tonnes
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.
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, there was a remarkable
fluctiation
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fluctuation
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France
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's
cultivating
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 in the
last
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 three decades.

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language use
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coherence
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task achievement
You provided a good overview of the trends in fruit production, which is crucial in IELTS Task 1 responses.

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