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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and table provide information about the
export
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 earnings of one nation in five different
categories
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, including petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, and
jewellery
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, from 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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export
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 earnings increased in all
categories
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 in 2016, except for gems and
jewellery
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.
Additionally
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, the percentage increase in the textiles industry was particularly significant. In detail, the columns illustrate that
export
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 earnings in petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods increased by 3.1% and 8.5%, respectively, reaching just above 60
billion
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 dollars in 2016.
Similarly
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,
Export
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 profits in agricultural
products
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 and textiles
also
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both
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apply
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climbed, to 31
billion
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dollar
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dollars
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.
In contrast
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, gems and
jewellery
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 showed a downward trend, from 45
billion
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 dollars to 41
billion
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 dollars.
Moreover
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, all sectors indicated a positive trend,
while
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 only one
sectore
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sector
 showed a downward trend.The Percentages of Gems and
Jewellery
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 decreased by 5.18%,
whereas
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,
agricultural
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the agricultural
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products
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 and textiles
categories
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 increased by 0.81% and 15.24% respectively, which was one of the highest changing
value
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values
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 among the five
categories
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, categories, products, jewellery, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • percentage change
  • value
  • machinery
  • textiles
  • agricultural products
  • raw materials
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • sector
  • growth
  • decline
  • economic factors
  • market demand
  • trade policies
  • contribution
  • anomalies
  • unexpected findings
  • implications
  • economy
  • trade negotiations
  • export strategies
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