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The table chart below shows the percentage of people using four different modes of transportation (cars, buses, bicycles, and trains) in a city in 2010, 2015, and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table chart below shows the percentage of people using four different modes of transportation (cars, buses, bicycles, and trains) in a city in 2010, 2015, and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides key information about the
percentage
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 of people who use transportation, there are four types
includes
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including
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 cars, buses, bicycles, as
wall
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well
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 as
train
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trains
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. The units are measured in percentages.  
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there has been an increase in the
percentage
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 of people who use
car
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cars
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 and
bicycle
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bicycles
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 over the decade.
In addition
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 , the largest increase in car
usage
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while
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,
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apply
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 bicycle
usage
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was
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increased slightly.  
According to
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 the data,
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usage
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the usage
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 rate of care was 50% in 2010. It increased to 55% in 2015, and
further
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 rose
about
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 60% in 2020. The
percentage
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 of people who used bicycles was 15% in 2010
than
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and
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 it increased in 2015 and 2020 from 15% to 18%.   Regarding buses, the
percentage
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 was 20% in 2010,
whereas
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 train
usage
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 was 15%. In 2015 and 2020 there was a slight decrease in train
usages
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usage
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 from 10% to 7%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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