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In Many countries, people throw away a lot of food from restaurants and shops. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amont of food thrown away?

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Food
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 is a basic necessity of human
being
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beings
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 and
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the wastage
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wastage
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waste
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 of
food
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is
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has been
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 increasing at an alarming rate
from
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last
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the last
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 few years in many countries.There are numerous reasons behind
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 problem.
This
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the
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 reasons and some solutions in the following paragraphs. There are
number
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a number
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 of factors responsible for
food
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 waste.First and foremost is
mass
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the mass
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 production of processed and canned
food
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 as many manufacturing companies produce
such
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 foodstuffs in bulk and when it is not sold out and expired, has to be thrown in
garbage
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the garbage
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.
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, Tim
hortons
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Hortons
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 is
largest
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the largest
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food
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 chain in Canada and
made
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makes
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 excessive
amount
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amounts
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 of Donuts,muffins and other
kind
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 of
food
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, which
has
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have
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 limited shelf-life and
thrown
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are thrown
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 away after
its
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their
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 expiry time, Which leads to
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wastage
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waste
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 of
food
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.Another striking reason for
this
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 obstacle is Inflation as prices of some cuisines are rising and consumers are not able to afford expensive dishes.
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, unsold
food
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 is being
dumbed
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dumped
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.
However
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, there are some reliable solutions to solve
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 problem.
Firstly
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, Restaurants should apply penalties on leftover dishes to their customers so they order meals
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 their needs
not
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, not
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 in excess, which will help in reducing the waste of
food
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.
Secondly
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,
government
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the government
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 should take some initiative to control over pricing of
food
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 items so that everyone can afford it and
promot
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promote
 less
wastage
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.To
exampilify
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exemplify
,
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the Canada
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Canada
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Canadian
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 government has
announce
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announced
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 no tax on groceries for
sometime
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some time
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 to help those who cannot buy expensive
food
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 and those who are starving.
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,
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 there are many reasons behind
food
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wastage
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 like excessive production and high prices,
yet
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apply
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it can be resolved by
takings
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taking
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 some feasible solutions as extra
fine
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fines
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 for leftover
food
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 and
government
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the government
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 can help it by reducing prices.

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task achievement
Clarify and elaborate on the key points you present. For instance, you could provide more context or further explanation on why mass production and inflation lead to food waste.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to another. You may want to use more linking words to improve the transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar for minor mistakes. For example, "excessive" instead of "excessive amount of" and "dropped" instead of "dumbed" to use proper vocabulary in context.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt effectively, identifying clear reasons for food wastage and proposing practical solutions.
task achievement
You present relevant examples to support your ideas, such as referencing Tim Hortons in Canada, which enhances the clarity of your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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