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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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consumption
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 in
calories
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 per person per
day
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 of
wheat
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rice
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 and maize in
compodi
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Compodi
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,
Poland
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 , Egypt,
Mexico
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and Mexico
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective , it is readily apparent that Compodia is the
higest
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highest
 consuming of
rice
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,
while
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wheat
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highly eaten
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is highly eaten
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 in Egypt .
However
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, Mexico is the highest country in consuming Maize. The first result worth pointing out is that 1445
of
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apply
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calories
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 consumed per
day
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 of
rice
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 in Compodia ,
while
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 the lowest country
on
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in
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consumption
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rice
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of rice
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 was
Poland
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by
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with
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 19
calories
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 per person per
day
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.
Also
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 worth noting is that in
Poland
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wheat
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 is
highest
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the highest
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consuption
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consumption
 by 865 , and the lowest
consumption
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 of
wheat
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 was in
combodi
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Combodi
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. Another thing that can be
overved
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overlooked
 is that Mexico
eating
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eats
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 high
calories
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 per person per
day
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 of maize on
other
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the other
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 hand,
Malize
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maize
is
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has
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 zero
consumption
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 in
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poland
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Poland
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. It is
also
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 worth noting that Egypt
consume
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consumes
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 the highest amount of
wheat
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 by 1095
calories
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 and
consider
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is considered
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largest
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the largest
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between
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among
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 all 4 countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, calories, day, wheat, rice, poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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