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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart indicates the value of one country's exports in five categories between 2015 and 2016.
Along with
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 a table describing incidence change in value during a year.
Overall
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, all of the export categories
were
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experienced growth except gems and jewellery, with textiles showing significant
improvment
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improvement
 by 15.24 per
cent
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.
Petorleum
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Petroleum
 products and engineered goods were both the primary exports in
this
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 country,
especially
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 engineered goods represented the larger increase
by
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of
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 8.5 per
cent
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 through a year.
Although
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 petroleum contributed
the
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 smaller rise, it still was a main export generating approximately $60 billion in 2016.
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, gems and jewellery
was
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were
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 the only category with
decreasing
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a decrease of
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 5.18 per
cent
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, it still ranked third producing nearly $40 billion
income
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in income
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 indeed.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
agricutural
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agricultural
 products had a moderate increase
by
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of
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 0.81 per
cent
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 which was ranked fourth. Despite textiles illustrated upward the most, it only contributed approximately $30 billion, which ranked the least in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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