The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15-64 in employment between 2003 and 2009.

The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15-64 in employment between 2003 and 2009.
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The graph illustrates
employment
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the employment
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rate of females aged between 15-64 in different nations during 2003-2009.
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, the majority of the countries, including Germany, Canada, and Chile showed increasing trends with Turkey’s percentage, which recovered after minimal decline. Meanwhile, Chile was the only country that
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undergone decline. Starting off with nations that followed a rising trajectory of women aged 15-64 who had jobs, Canada and Germany recorded a similar improvement in which the previous stood at just below 70%
2003
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in 2003
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, where the latter was by 10% less at that time. In 2007 Canada reached 70% of females who were occupied, the numbers which have not changed by 2009. At the same time, Germany followed a more steady rise by around 2% each period to indicate 65% of female professionals owing jobs. Between 2003
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2005
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and 2005
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Chile saw a remarkable uprise from around 35% to 40% before increasing moderately in the later periods culminating at just above 40% in the final year. Whilst, Turkey recovered to its original index in the final year (2009),
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was about 25% in 2003, with
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reduction in percentage in 2005 and 2007.
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Iceland reflected the highest numbers it remained
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the only nation where
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the employment
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rate of women
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was reduced
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.
Untill
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Until
2007 percentages have not changed and indicated approximately 81% of Iceland women who were employed, after which the numbers fell to roughly 79% in 2009.

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Vocabulary: The word "indicate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • employment
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • analyze
  • overall
  • compare
  • implications
  • workforce
  • ages 15-64
  • data
  • rate
  • yearly changes
  • significant
  • stability
  • roles
  • factors
  • influenced
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