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Some people think that teacher should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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discern
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decrease
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youngsters
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teachers should
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 teach moral values, or solely focus
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 academic areas. From my point of view teachers and
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parents
 should work together to teach moral values.
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 essay will analyse the most significant points from both statements. On the one hand, those who think that educators should help students the difference between what is socially
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 bad. It is because they have more experience and methodology to explain difficult and complicated subjects,
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 in the
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 to understand.
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 example, a survey
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published
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 magazine" said that 82% of students were more
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confused
 after their parents try to explain to them why is bad to lie.
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, Educators are better
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such
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, parents must fortify
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 adquared moral
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knowledge
.
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, those who
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oppose
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should
 only concentrate on
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 lectures
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because Moral Values are
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subjective
, as they are subjected to each person's interpretation. which means that
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others
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 it can be considered bad.
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, smoking is acceptable for some people
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others
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 consider it deplorable. As
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 a third person ( in
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pedagogies
pedagogues
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) to teach kids their own moral perspective. For
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pupils can be easily influenced especially for
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autostart
 figures.
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, In
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Peru,
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 a deem of a secondary school incentivised his students to try
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ayahuasca
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a peruvian
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 drug) because he was a practitioner and
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 it to be
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healthy
.
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, the importance of
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parents'
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 validation of the information
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received
 at school. In conclusion, it is imperative to
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Ethical
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mentioned
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, it should always be validated and reinforced by guardians. It is predicted that in future if a cooperation tactic is implemented, it will
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kids
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 with better
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judgment
judgement
 of right and wrong.

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Work on improving the clarity of your ideas. Some points need more development and clearer connections to your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using linking words more effectively can help your essay navigate from one point to another more smoothly.
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Make sure to give a consistent and thorough analysis of both views before stating your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and vocabulary accuracy. Some mistakes could hinder the reader’s understanding.
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You present a balanced discussion of both viewpoints, which is a key requirement for this type of essay.
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Your opinion is clearly stated, making it easy to see where you stand on the issue.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ethical development
  • moral compass
  • character building
  • values and principles
  • curriculum
  • academic knowledge
  • subject expertise
  • pedagogical approach
  • value education
  • moral dilemmas
  • social responsibility
  • behavioral norms
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