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household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Australian household energy use water heating 30% heating 42% refrigeration 7% cooling 2% other appliances 15% lighting 4% Australian household greenhouse gas emissions heating 15% cooling 3% lighting 8% water heating 32% other appliances 28% refrigeration 14%

household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Australian household energy use water heating 30% heating 42% refrigeration 7% cooling 2% other appliances 15% lighting 4% Australian household greenhouse gas emissions heating 15% cooling 3% lighting 8% water heating 32% other appliances 28% refrigeration 14%
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The first piechart illustrates energy consumption in Australian homes and the second one compares the greenhouse gas emissions in the process. The units are in percentage.
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, it can be seen that the majority of household energy was used on heating, whilst water heating was the highest emitter of carbon, even without spending the most.
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, looking at the first chart in detail, a portion of 42% was recorded on heating.
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 is almost half of all energy supply to homes.
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, a substantial fraction of 30% was spent on water heating.
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 other appliances expended about 15%, cooling and lighting used less than 5%.
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, considering the greenhouse emission compared in the second pie chart, aqua heating was the most significant emitter at 32%.
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 is followed by other appliances, with a 28% rate of pollution. Despite having an enormous power consumption, heating only expelled 15% of carbon into the environment.
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, Cooling released 2%,
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 the least generally.

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