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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided data illustrates the sales volume of two Fairtrade-labelled products,
coffee
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 and bananas, across five European countries from 1994 to 2024.
Overall
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,
the
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a
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 drastic increase is shown for the United Kingdom in terms of both goods,
while
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 the trend for Denmark and Sweden remains almost steady. 
In contrast
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, the sales volumes in other countries exhibit moderate fluctuations over the period. The table clearly indicates that in the United Kingdom purchase of both commodities has surged during a five-year period. Still, the banana trade has more change in comparison with the
coffee
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 transaction. In 1999,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
has
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apply
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purchased
the
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apply
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banana
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bananas
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 worth 15
million
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euros
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,
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while
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and
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 the number
is
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will be
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 47
million
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euros
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 in 2024. In the first year of comparison,
UK
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the UK
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has
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apply
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bought
coffee
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costs
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cost
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 1.5
million
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euros
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, yet the amount
is
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was
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 20
million
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euros
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 in the
last
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 year. The shift difference of the
first mentioned
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first-mentioned
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 good is roughly 14
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros
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 more than the
second mentioned
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second-mentioned
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 item. 
On the other hand
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, the transaction of given merchandise in Sweden stays almost constant.
Although
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,
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apply
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coffee
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 vending has gradually
rose
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risen
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, the banana trade has declined.
Nevertheless
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, the distinction has not dramatically fluctuated within the given half-a-decade timeframe. The change does not even reach
to
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apply
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one
million
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euros
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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