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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of eports in compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of eports in compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart above
represent
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 information about one country's exports
various
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in various
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 categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the
percentage
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 change in each category of
eports
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exports
 in
compared
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comparison
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 with 2015. In
this
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essay
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i
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 will illustrate the information
of
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on
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petroleum products , engineered goods ,gems and jewellery ,agricultural
producs
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products
 and textiles .
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Also
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i
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 will make comparisons between them . In 2015 and 2016
the
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apply
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petroleum products it was
approaximately
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approximately
level
they
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rise
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 up to 65
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percentage
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per cent
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 in 2015 and it was 70
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percentage
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per cent
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 in 2016. the engineered goods
it
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was almost
same
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the same
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 between 2015 and 2016.The gems and jewellery
the
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level it
was reduce
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up
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to almost
same
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the same
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 55 in 2015 and 2016 . The agricultural
producs
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products
 the
percentage
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it
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apply
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was
sighificant
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significant
 fall
40
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of 40
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. In the
last
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 category was textiles 32
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percentage
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 in 2015 and in 2016 rate was almost 42 .
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 , the
peopel
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people
2015
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in 2015
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 and 2016 they are more demand
on
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for
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petroleum products ,
engineered
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and engineered
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 goods and they
was
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were
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 less use of gems and jewellery ,agricultural
producs
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products
 and textiles .

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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