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Describe the graphs on peoples perception in Central Asia towards china, with the focus on Kazakhstanians.

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at the time, discourses on the "
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 expansion" (
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 surveys indicated widespread fear about
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 immigration. The large survey covering 1 500 people from the Central Asia Barometer (2023) investigated how public opinion changed over the years
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 that the negative
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China
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 increased from 16% to almost 45% from 2017 to 2021 respectively. The uncertainty and hesitation to decide a side
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 increased from 8% to 14% respectively. A similar scale survey in 2022 showed that, at the time, the dominant public
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 of
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 people toward
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 was a little better than that of the US and Russia. About 48% of responders have had very favourable and somewhat favourable
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 about
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 (13% and 34% respectively). Much more than people who were somewhat unfavourable and very unfavourable towards
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 35% (17% and 18% respectively).
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 survey was cited by the authors who were raising attention
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 the growing signals. Later in 2024, the report shows that the high “unfavourable” trend decreased and was replaced with a more positive
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 of the public. The most recent qualitative interview research covers a vast and diverse group of responders and investigates the changing trends in sinophobia. Reasons for
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 negative
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 include inequality in
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 enterprises, where
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 workers face discrimination; fears of economic dependency; concerns over the environmental impact of
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 investments; and the
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 that
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's growing presence undermines Kazakhstan's sovereignty and cultural identity (Rice, 2023). At the same time, the young
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 graduates from
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 universities have a neutral-positive attitude towards
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. The fear of political and economic dependency is more rooted in distrust of the government than in concerns about
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 itself (Arynov 2022). Another study shows that learning the
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 less popular because of
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 enterprises' behaviour.
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 language proficiency is perceived as an important skill that provides opportunities, the reality is that “
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 companies do not employ our citizens with
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 education” (Rice, 2023, p.). Over the years, anti-
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sentiments
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 have evolved from viewing
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 as a cultural enemy and a mythical expansionist power—often influenced by Western notions of a growing threat—to more precise and rational "offensive"
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. These now reflect reactions to specific
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 actors' practices and national policies.
On the other hand
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, the
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 political elites have been protecting the honour of their strategic partner, criticising
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, and dismissing the idea of cultural, territorial, or economic expansion.

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance the introduction and conclusion to clearly summarize the main points and insights drawn from the essay. This will help to better frame the discussion and reinforce your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas to improve overall flow and coherence. Linking phrases and transitional words can significantly enhance readability.
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While your points are well-supported with data, including a brief analysis of how these perceptions impact Kazakhstan's relationship with China could add depth to your response.
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Ensure that references to studies and surveys are clearly cited within the text to enhance credibility and allow the reader to easily follow your arguments.
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The use of recent surveys and qualitative data to illustrate changing perceptions towards China is commendable and adds a strong evidential base to your arguments.
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The evolution of sentiments from cultural perceptions to specific grievances is a nuanced analysis that demonstrates a deep understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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