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Band 6.5

The graph line below shows the oil production and consuming in china between 1982 and 2006 .

The graph line below shows the oil production and consuming in china between 1982 and 2006 .
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The provided figure depicts the sum of oil China is producing and the level of
consuming
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. The study is measured by a scale of numbers from 1982 to 2006 .
Overall
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 , it can be clearly seen that the total
figuers
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figures
figure
of
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 production showed
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trend
upwardthrough
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upward through
 the given period . In comparison ,
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the consuning
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consuning
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consuming
 level
also
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rised
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raised
rose
rise
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 was higher . In the realm of the period 1986 to 1994 , in 1982 the sum of oil barrels produced was around 2
million
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 ,
consuming
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and the consumption
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 level was
slight
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 less . In the next year in 1986 , producing jumped to
became
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3
million
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 ,
while
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 the usage figures slightly grew . But from 1986 to 1994 the total numbers remained stable for
producion
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production
 rather than
consuming
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that
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skyrockted
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skyrocketed
 to reach more than 3
million
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.  In the arena of the period between 1994 and 2006 ,
Oil
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 industry
kept
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registered
gradully
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gradually
gradual
 growth to end
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just around 3.5 .
In
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 the other side, the numbers of production dramatically increased to reach a peak
just
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 above 6
million
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 barrels per day .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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