the chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and renred accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

the chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and renred accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of households in owned and rented houses in Britain from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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, in the
beginning
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beginning,
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the percentage of households
rented
Correct pronoun usage
that rented
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accommodation
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saw a remarkable decrease,
while
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households in owned
accommodation
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witnessed a steady increase. The proportion of people
Correct pronoun usage
who rented
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rented
Wrong verb form
renting
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accommodation
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accounted for around 76% in 1918,
then
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it dropped to around 68% in 1939 and remained it until 1953 before decreasing decade by decade to just above 30% in 2000,
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finally
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finally,
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it slightly recovered 36% in 2011. On the
hand
Correct word choice
other hand
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, people bought
accommodation
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with
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by
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approximately 24% in 1918, it increased
nearly
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to nearly
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double
with
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to
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around 50% in 1971. In the following decade, the percentage of owned surpassed rented to become the highest,
also
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reached
the
Correct article usage
a
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peak point
with
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of
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nearly 70% in 2001 and it slightly dropped to 64% in 2011.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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