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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint?

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Nowadays, it’s common in human nature that they have different expectations from their jobs. Few individuals like to do
same
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job
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 for their whole life but there are some different types of human beings as well and they like to
change
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job
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jobs
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 frequently, both
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things have their own pros and cons that we will discuss in
this
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 essay. On the
one
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 hand, few
people
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who
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wants
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 to stay in
one
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company
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 until the end of their working life because they
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 that if they
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continue
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work
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working
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 for the same
company
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, it has some
benefit
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benefits
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 for them like, they will know everything about that
firm
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 deeply, they become more and more familiar with working atmosphere, they will get a promotion and higher wage after working few
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, they become more friendly with colleagues. But it has some disadvantages
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for example
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, they will stuck
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same
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 place for their whole life, they will not get
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a chance
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 to learn any different things, they will not be able to know what's going on in
other field
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another field
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.
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,
my
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one
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 of
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friend
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is
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has been
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 working for
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company
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the company
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from
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last
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the last
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 5
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 and he just got
promotion
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a promotion
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 and
increase
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an increase
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 in salary because he
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work
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has worked
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 for that
company
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from
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for
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last
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the last
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 5
years
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.
However
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, many individuals like to
change
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job
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jobs
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 frequently. The main reason behind
this
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 is they are getting higher
wage
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wages
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 and
post
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posts
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 in
other
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another firm
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firm
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, and it is a big advantage of changing
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job
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jobs
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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 some
people
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 do not like to
work
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 in
same
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 field for
years
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 they
are thinking
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 that if they
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the
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company
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, they will get a different knowledge about
different
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the different
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field
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, they will get a chance to know more
people
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 and it will increase their ability to learn and knowledge. But it has
it's
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 own downsides
also
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 because if they
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change
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 their roles continuously, they will not get
learn
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 properly and deeply about any
firm
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, and it will
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effect
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affect
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 their resume and when
other
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another firm
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firm
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 will hire you first they will think that you will leave their
company
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 in
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a short
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 time of period because you do not have
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the stability
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 of your
work
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 in your resume.
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, in
recent
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serve
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survey
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 of the employment rates they declared that 10% of
people
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 lost their jobs in
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last
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the last
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 1 year because they do not have
stability
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the stability
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 of
work
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 in their resume and past. In conclusion, it depends
on
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 person to person whether they want to
change
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 their jobs continuously or they want to stick with
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,
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 because each
points
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 have many advantages and disadvantages
also
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.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the main points of the task, but it could benefit from a more detailed exploration of the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint. Try to present a more balanced view and elaborate on specific examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly relates to the main topic and remains focused. Transition phrases could improve the flow of your ideas and make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. Some sentences were slightly awkwardly phrased, which may have affected clarity. Proofreading your work can help catch these issues before submission.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps the reader understand your main points.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of both viewpoints regarding job expectations and includes relevant examples to support your claims, which is important for task achievement.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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