You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..............,

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Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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letter to ask permission to work in
Janpan's
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Japan's
head office for
next
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6 months. My brother
has
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met with an accident and was admitted
in
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to
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Appolo
hospital
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Hospital
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in Japan. So, a caretaker is needed to take care of him.
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, he needs
an
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emotional support from me and it will boost his confidence in overcoming his injuries. I can work from Japan and
tranfer
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transfer
all the documents and data to the regional manager.
Moreover
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, my colleague
accepeted
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accepted
my request
in helping
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with the monthly targets. So, any work would not be interrupted and can be completed
in
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on
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time. I would need your support and help in
this
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matter. I am attaching all the required documents and application
form
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in
this
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letter. Please accept my request and transfer me to
Japan'
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head office for six months. I will deliver my duty without delay and productively. I am looking forward to your prompt response to
this
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request. Yours faithfully, Santhoshkumar

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task response
Try to clarify your request in the introduction to make it immediately clear to your manager why you are writing.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use consistent formatting and language throughout the letter; for example, check spelling errors like 'Janpan' and 'Appolo'.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down your ideas into more distinct paragraphs to enhance readability, especially when discussing your plans while away.
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Your letter expresses a personal need that conveys a strong emotional appeal.
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You have communicated the arrangements for your work in a clear manner, showing responsibility.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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