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Band 4

Today some people can work from home using modern technology. Some say this only benefits workers, but not employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that working from
home
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 with the aid of technology favours
employees
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,
whereas
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 it doesn't provide any benefits to the
employer
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. In my opinion both the
employer
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 and employee
is benefiting
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through work
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from working
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 from
home
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 and I completely disagree with
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. In
this
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 era, to be precise after the covid pandemic, a majority of public
as well as
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 private organisations support their
employees
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 with an option to work from
home
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.
This
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 arrangement gave the
workers
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,
a
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the
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 flexibility to finish their tasks based on their convenience. The
employees
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are benefited
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 with more time to complete household chores and spend time with their families. Another notable gain to
workers
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 is that
,
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 it helps them to save a huge sum of money through travel and fuel expenses.
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, in certain countries
such
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 as Australia, clients have the
opportinity
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opportunity
 to claim more amount from tax
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 working from
in
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a
home
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 setting.
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,
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employer
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the employer
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recieves
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receives
 a fair amount of gains through
this
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 option.
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, companies could rent out much smaller
area
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areas
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 to
funtion
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function
,
thus
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 less spending on office space leading to
a
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decreased expenses on
utillities
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utilities
. Another prominent advantage is less staff turnover. If entities
favours
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the
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apply
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employees
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 with
self care
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self-care
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, the
likelyhood
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likelihood
 of
workers
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 transitioning firms reduces to a large amount and thereby companies exhibit
a
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high productivity. In conclusion, the benefits of
workers
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as well as
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 the
employer
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 through work from
home
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outweighs
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 the disadvantages.

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task achievement
Ensure to clarify your viewpoint in the introduction to enhance clarity, and make sure to provide a stronger connection between examples and your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the transitions between ideas to help guide the reader more smoothly through your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your essay for minor grammar and spelling issues, such as 'opportinity' which should be 'opportunity' and 'utillities' which should be 'utilities'.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your main points, particularly regarding financial benefits and flexibility for employees.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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