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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of UK
students
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 at one tertiary in England who can speak other foreign
languages
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in addition
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 to English, by the
years
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 2000 and
years
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 2010.
Overall
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,
students
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 who speak Spanish accounted for the highest percentage for both
years
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. University
students
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 can speak another language or two other
languages
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 in 2010.
On the other hand
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,
Students
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 who only speak English or speak French only experienced a decrease. The remained sector was speaking German only remained no change in two
years
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. In 2000, British
students
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 who can speak Spanish had 30% and it increased slightly to 35% in 2010.
Students
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 speak two other
languages
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 or another language who increased the same proportion in the following decade from 10% to 15%, and 15% to 20% respectively.
Students
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 who can not speak other
languages
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 are set to become the biggest loser with a loss of 10% from 20% to 10%.
Students
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 who can speak French experienced a slight decrease from 15% to 10%.
Additionally
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, the number of speaking German
only
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apply
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students
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 stay the same between 2000 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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