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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure presents the rate of education of men and women who have studied in Britain as full-time or part-time
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 within three periods.
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, marked trends towards a higher number of full-timers were shown within the three-year period,
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 part-timers were only shown a significant increase for female
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. From 1970 to 1990, full-time
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 significantly increased from 100 to more than 200 for both men and women admission, which recorded
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2 times increase.
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 rise has been driven by female
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, who were recorded to grow by approximately 50% from 1970 to 1980. Having that, male
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 still recorded to have the highest number of full-timers by the end of 1990. Part-time who have recorded as the largest portion of British
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,
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 growing significantly for female
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, recorded at the highest point around more than 1000
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 by the end of 1990. Male full-time
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 happened to experience a decline of around 20% from 1970 to 1980
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 but
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 showed a modest growth
at the end
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 of 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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