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You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room and explain your reasons. You should Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to requesting a single room for next term. I am a student of this college studying acconting diploma which started recently. These day comming from my reletives house, they alloved to stay there only for three month duration.one of their chiled who lived out side of the city comming to live with them in near future. Due to this situvation I have to find out another place for living. As my experiance it is very hard to find comfotable and secure place near by the college.Other than that most places need to shere with the someone who unkown. I am concerning living along. I used to live without disruption others from child hood. Hence need single room for me with out shering anyone. It is plesure if you allocate me a room for next term. Thank You Your's Faithfully Andrea I am writing this letter to requesting a single room for next term. I am a student of this college studying acconting diploma which started recently. These day comming from my reletives house, they alloved to stay there only for three month duration.one of their chiled who lived out side of the city comming to live with them in near future. Due to this situvation I have to find out another place for living. As my experiance it is very hard to find comfotable and secure place near by the college.Other than that most places need to shere with the someone who unkown. I am concerning living along. I used to live without disruption others from child hood. Hence need single room for me with out shering anyone. It is plesure if you allocate me a room for next term. Thank You Your's Faithfully Andrea

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 a single room for next term. I am a student of
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 college studying
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accounting
 diploma which started recently.
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comming
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 from my reletives house, they
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another place
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experience
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 it is very hard to find
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comfortable
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the college.Other than that most places need to
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share
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someone who
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. I used to live without disruption
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shering
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sharing
 anyone. It is
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pleasure
 if you allocate me a room for next term. Thank You Your's Faithfully Andrea

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coherence and cohesion
The opening could be more concise; consider simplifying your request in the first sentence.
task achievement
Avoid repetition in your letter. For example, you mentioned living situation several times but did not elaborate on your feelings about sharing with strangers. This can add depth to your letter.
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Ensure to correct spelling errors (e.g., 'accounting', 'relatives', 'child', 'situation') for better clarity and professionalism.
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You've clearly stated your request for a single room, which is the main purpose of the letter.
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You included reasoning behind your request, which is important for the reader to understand your situation.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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