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The chart below shows the percentage in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how the percentages of international graduates in several
cities
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 in 2001 and 2006.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in 2006, all
cities
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 had more students from other countries. The exception was for
Alberta
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, which was higher in the first period. In 2001, more than 5 per
cent
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 of universities in New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, and Quebec had students come from another country,
whereas
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 in
Alberta
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, the international student graduation was exactly 5 per
cent
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, and the others were below
Alberta
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. In the next 5 years, all
cities
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 significantly increased. The biggest differentiation came from the British Columbia district, which expanded to more than 10 per
cent
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. Actually, only 3
cities
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 had
lot
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a lot
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 of international students, more than 10 per
cent
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. The
cities
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 are New Brunswick and Nova Scotia. Quebec, Manitoba, and Newfoundland increased moderately between 5 and 10 per
cent
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. The percentage of other
cities
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 was lower than
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Alberta
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in Alberta
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, which was only below 5
percent
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per cent
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, alberta, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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