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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph line illustrates
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the univeristy
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univeristy
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university
graduates
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number
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 categorized by gender ( females and males) in Canada between 1992 to 2007.
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OVerall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
females
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female
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graduates
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 dominated the chart over the period,
Menawhile
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Meanwhile
, the
males
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male
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graduates
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number
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 Were lower in numbers compared to their
females
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female
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 counterparts . In 1992, the
number
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 of
graduates
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 women where approximately 100,000, the figure began to rise until
its
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 declined slightly
at
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to
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 nearly 105,000 in the 96s.
Then
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, the figure
remainded
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remained
reminded
steable
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stable
afterward
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afterwards
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;
However
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, the
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graduates
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graduate's
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number
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's skyrocketed by 1999,
with
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apply
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reaching its peak at 150,000
in
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at
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 the end of the period.
In contrast
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, the
male
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number of male
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graudates
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graduates
number
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were
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was
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 at 70,000
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period, and
witness
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witnessed
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similar
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a similar
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 trend with female
graduates
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. After 1996, the figure started to fluctuate;
Nevertheless
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, the
number
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 increased significantly in 2002. which continued its
rose
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 until 2006 and reached approximately 99,000 male
graduates
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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