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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruitd and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruitd and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart displays the percentage of fruits and vegetables consumed by people from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
Linking Words
, the number of women who eat fruits and vegetables
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
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 increased steadily over the years and the graph shows a similar pattern of growth of men, women, and children who daily consumption. Women's fruits and
vegetables
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vegetable
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 consumption
has
Unnecessary verb
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increased
steadliy
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steadily
 from a slightly over 20% to above 30% from 2001 to 2006 which fell to 30% in 2008. Children's eating habits have changed drastically from around 10% to
a
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slightly below 30% from 2001 to 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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