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Band 4.5

You saw an advertisement seeking volunteers for a project aimed at improving environmental protection. Write a letter to the project organizers. In your letter: • Introduce yourself and explain your interest in the project. • Describe how you can contribute to the project. • Mention your availability for participation

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Dear Sir, I would like to express my interest
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 a project aimed at improving environmental protection. I am intrigued to be a part of
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 project as it will be a great imitative to protect our environment and
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 awareness about protecting the resources for our future generations. I am a student of Journalism so I will be able to convey your agenda to
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 through my articles and hosting rallies in local neighbourhoods.
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 will spread awareness among the local residents.
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, I can make arrangements to publish an advertisement in Local
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 and
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 magazines to attract more youngsters to participate. I can help in campaign design, data collection and organising rallies. I am available in
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 on all days of the week except weekends. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Samreen

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task achievement
Consider using more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance the overall fluency of your writing. For example, instead of 'great imitative', you might want to say 'commendable initiative'.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly focuses on one main idea. For example, the second paragraph could be separated into two distinct paragraphs: one focusing on your skills and the other on specific suggestions.
task achievement
You effectively conveyed your passion for environmental protection and your willingness to contribute to the project.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear greeting and closing, making it easy to follow the main points you want to communicate.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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