Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal questions such as their hobbies and interest, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Discuss both side and give your opinion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prospective employee
  • company culture
  • job performance
  • marital status
  • professional abilities
  • intrusive questions
  • biased hiring process
  • personal characteristics
  • unique professional skills
  • right to privacy
  • power imbalance
  • qualifications
  • compatibility
  • professional achievements
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