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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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The first bar chart illustrates the rate of women and men who do cooking, cleaning, pet care and house repairs in their houses. The other one shows how much time on average they spend on those activities. Certainly, the most time-consuming is cooking. It stands for 60 minutes of male work and above 80 minutes of female. The only thing both genders spend the same amount of time on is pet caring
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that
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which
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 is equal to 20 minutes.
It is clear that
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 men do more house renovations. It is slightly below 20
percent
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per cent
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 of their
house
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house's
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 responsibilities to repair stuff. Cooking is
women
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women's
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 domain as they do it more than 20
percent
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per cent
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 more.
Overall
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, girls spend significantly more time cleaning the same space,
while
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 guys do renovations much quicker

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